tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8850478732283242286.post9024100071200495229..comments2023-09-10T04:53:56.259-07:00Comments on Summer Haiku 2007: Alisonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07005806387830212175noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8850478732283242286.post-55087160160045101192007-06-04T15:47:00.000-07:002007-06-04T15:47:00.000-07:00I had on of those days recently....I had on of those days recently....Reihaishahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17667891019180359894noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8850478732283242286.post-67972483988045226472007-06-04T10:54:00.000-07:002007-06-04T10:54:00.000-07:00Thank you again, Alan. Your original comment set ...Thank you again, Alan. Your original comment set me off googling about "negative space," where I read some interesting stuff about it in visual art. <BR/><BR/>I completely agree about that delicate balance between too little or too much, both in the words chosen and the content. That's why I ultimately gave up calling my haiku on dreams, haiku. I'm now calling them "dreamku: a new haiku inspired form." The way I want and need to work with dreams most of the time demands a "muchness" that is not fully in the haiku spirit. Not to mention that my on-going struggle with writing regular haiku is a tendency to "stuff" them. LOL!Roswilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15669275952943509399noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8850478732283242286.post-5087730545641223762007-06-04T04:14:00.000-07:002007-06-04T04:14:00.000-07:00Hi Roswila,It's partly that, and the fact you have...Hi Roswila,<BR/><BR/>It's partly that, and the fact you haven't flooded/swamped the haiku with detail.<BR/><BR/>As you know, there's a fine balance between putting too much in and leaving too much out, including the natural flow of language! ;-)<BR/><BR/>In my opinion, this is a haiku worth considering for your collection, or an anthology.<BR/><BR/>It's very succinct, and although minimalist, it doesn't come across as that because it has a 'normal' language feel to it, and will be an excellent haiku for readings too! ;-)Area 17https://www.blogger.com/profile/07472190637554124160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8850478732283242286.post-91586737484352124142007-06-03T11:43:00.000-07:002007-06-03T11:43:00.000-07:00Thanks, Alan. Do I understand your use of the ter...Thanks, Alan. Do I understand your use of the term "negative space" correctly? In that it's effective because of what's not stated?Roswilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15669275952943509399noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8850478732283242286.post-51586384524050199652007-06-03T04:04:00.000-07:002007-06-03T04:04:00.000-07:00I like this! Very distilled, making good use of n...I like this! <BR/><BR/>Very distilled, making good use of <I>negative space</I>.Area 17https://www.blogger.com/profile/07472190637554124160noreply@blogger.com